you have to get out of here your vagina is haunted ([info]musesfool) wrote,
@ 2003-06-10 17:06:00
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bit o' fic
So. Remus. Five things that never happened.

This is one of 'em.

Ravenclaw

Remus pushed his way through the back door of the cottage, looking around carefully to make sure no one was about before he slipped into the garden.

At the far side of the hedge, he found it -- the broom his uncle had hidden from him just before he’d been called into supper that night.

The moon was full, and he wondered why his parents made them go to bed so early, when there was so much light, it was like daytime. A laugh burbled up and he forgot he was supposed to be quiet, that he couldn’t wake anyone up or he’d be in a lot of trouble.

He swung a leg over the broom and kicked off the ground. He was surprised when it rose over the hedge and took him out into the street -- this was so much better than the toy his parents’ had given him when he turned five last month.

The broom vibrated beneath him, and for a few minutes he zoomed through the streets of the village, laughing gleefully at his secret adventure. No one would ever believe it. He couldn’t wait to tell.

He was heading back toward home when he heard it -- a howl that made the hair on his neck stand up and the skin on his arms break out in goosebumps. He sped up, scared now, remembering that it wasn’t daytime, that there were dark things out at night and even if there weren’t, his parents wouldn’t be too happy about him sneaking around.

Fear overwhelmed him and he lost control of the broom, crashing to the ground headfirst. Dazed, he looked up to see a sleek, gray wolf loping up Main Street toward him. He scrabbled back, unable to get up, sharp shooting pains in his left shoulder and leg making him whimper.

The wolf lunged and a shot rang out, then another. It fell in a bloody, slavering heap on top of Remus, who cried like the five-year-old he was.

His father and uncle sped to his side, shotguns in hand, kicking the beast off him, all warm hands and concerned voices.

He blacked out, and woke to his mother’s gentle hands upon his brow, her eyes shining brightly as she told him he was very lucky and if he loved her at all, he must never ever have adventures again.

***

“Lupin, Remus,” McGonagall called, and eleven-year-old Remus walked to the dais and settled the Sorting Hat upon his head.

~Hmm,~ the Hat said, and he flinched. ~Loyal, yes, and brave, but what’s this? No desire for adventures? You certainly have the brains for--~ “RAVENCLAW!” the Hat called out, and he made his way over to the Ravenclaw table to the cheers of his new housemates.

***

Remus fit in well at Ravenclaw. He spent most of his time in the library, working on projects that would have baffled most wizards his age. He was top of his class in Defence and second only to Snape in Potions. His only other competition came from the two Gryffindors, James Potter and Sirius Black.

He watched them in envy sometimes, the playful banter and wrestling in which they engaged, the way they excitement always followed them, but his mother’s words always stuck with him – “No more adventures, my dear sweet boy. Not if you love your mother.”

And he did love his mother, and so heeded her words almost until the day he died.

The Death Eaters attempted to recruit him, both during his last year at Hogwarts, when a third of his fellow Ravenclaws joined the Dark Lord, and after he'd left school, but Remus knew evil when he saw it, remembered it in the mad yellow eyes of the wolf, and everything in him rebelled against it.

He explored ever more esoteric avenues of magic for Professor Dumbledore after leaving school, contributed in his own quiet way to the Order of the Phoenix, and it was through his painstaking research that the Potters were protected, obscure wards and charms the last line of defense should their Secret-Keeper fail.

No one ever expected one of their closest friends to betray them to their deaths, to provide not only their location, but the key to all of Remus’s well-designed protection spells as well.

Reading of that betrayal in the Daily Prophet, Remus was glad he had never become close to James Potter or Sirius Black.

He lived alone and died young, in the second war against Voldemort, giving his life bravely so that Harry Potter could live. He finally had another adventure, and it was enough to make him laugh as he had as a child, enjoying his last breaths more than the millions that had come before.

~*~

Still writing, but hope to be finished soon. Still need a beta...

Home soon. Lovely day out. Maybe I'll walk. Hmmm...



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[info]taibhrigh
2003-06-10 02:47 pm UTC (link)
Good story, but poor Remus.

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[info]musesfool
2003-06-10 08:41 pm UTC (link)
Thanks! And this is mild compared to a couple of the others.

Sigh. 'Poor Remus' is right. *eg*

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[info]taibhrigh
2003-06-11 10:17 am UTC (link)
Is Remus a character you like to, "beat up on" (that wasn't the phrase I was looking for but it will do for now)?

And did you pick him because you didn't like the character or because you thought the character had more potential than what was seen in the book(s)? Or, for another reason?

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[info]musesfool
2003-06-11 10:29 am UTC (link)
Is Remus a character you like to, "beat up on" (that wasn't the phrase I was looking for but it will do for now)?

Honestly, no. Remus is a character to whom I'd like to do things that would make my mother blush and disown me.

I picked him because he's my favorite of the adults and yet there's so little we know about him, and I was just thinking of how he'd have turned out had he been sorted into other houses and the stories started writing themselves. And none of them worked out really well for him.

Which surprises me, because I generally don't write angst or darkfic.

I think he suffers beautifully, though. And I live in hope that he'll get his happy ending with a cottage in the Cotswolds and Sirius by his side. *g* So it's okay to torture him because I know that things work out, that he and Sirius become "friends" (ahem) again.

It's the Fandom of Delayed Gratification instead of a complete Fandom of Pain, if that makes sense.

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[info]taibhrigh
2003-06-12 01:27 pm UTC (link)
I think he suffers beautifully, though.

He does. It's just that of most of the adults, I think he seemed most real even though we didn't know much about him.

And I live in hope that he'll get his happy ending

You always want the happy endings for the characters you really like.

It's the Fandom of Delayed Gratification instead of a complete Fandom of Pain, if that makes sense.

Makes perfect sense. Here's to hoping for that perfect, happy ending.

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[info]musesfool
2003-06-13 06:43 am UTC (link)
It's just that of most of the adults, I think he seemed most real even though we didn't know much about him.

Well, he's not a caricature or a stereotype, which many of the adults in HP are (or at least they start out seeming that way). JKR did a good job fleshing him out, even if only from Harry's POV.

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[info]maidenjedi
2003-06-10 04:05 pm UTC (link)
Damn.

Really, victoria, this is some kind of wonderful. Your Remus rings *so* true.

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[info]musesfool
2003-06-10 08:46 pm UTC (link)
Really? Thanks! I was afraid he might be too meek in this one, but then, without the wolf and his Gryffindor friends...

Love your icon, btw.

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[info]musesfool
2003-06-11 01:07 pm UTC (link)
Oh, I meant to ask, are you available as a beta when I finish this?

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[info]maidenjedi
2003-06-11 04:38 pm UTC (link)
Yes, absolutely. Just send it when you're ready. :-)

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[info]musesfool
2003-06-12 09:36 am UTC (link)
Cool! Thanks.

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[info]naomichana
2003-06-10 07:25 pm UTC (link)
I love it all except the last paragraph. Why does it need to be there? It just seems too quick and raises too many new questions(died young? How? How did he come into contact with Harry if not through DADA and the Marauders conntection? How did he overcome his lifelong aversion to adventure?). Unless you're determined to carry each of the Five Things up through Remus' death or at least PoA, the penultimate paragraph seems like a good place to end.

Five things... Ravenclaw, Hufflepuff, Slytherin... squib, non-werewolf Gryffindor? I enjoy figuring out what people are likely to do with their fives. :)

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[info]musesfool
2003-06-10 09:03 pm UTC (link)
I love it all except the last paragraph. Why does it need to be there?

Hmm... I think it was about bringing him around to one last adventure, but you're right. It's not necessary.

Five things... Ravenclaw, Hufflepuff, Slytherin... squib, non-werewolf Gryffindor? I enjoy figuring out what people are likely to do with their fives. :)

Huh. I didn't even think of squib. Amazingly, I thought of something darker. Now I just have to see if I can write it.

Thanks for the kind words and for making me think.

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[info]jerel
2003-06-11 05:42 am UTC (link)
I really liked this, even though I did say "oh, poor Remus!" at least 5 times. However, the point is you got to me emotionally, and that's something. :)

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[info]musesfool
2003-06-11 08:16 am UTC (link)
Hee!

Get used to saying, "Poor Remus," 'cause I gotta say, things just don't seem to be going the poor dear's way. *g*

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[info]sileas
2003-06-11 09:13 am UTC (link)
*sob* Goddammit. I liked it.

The beginning was very good and an idea that rings true, but I would have liked the story to slow down with lots more details.

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[info]musesfool
2003-06-11 10:24 am UTC (link)
Thanks!

I would have liked the story to slow down with lots more details.

We-ell... it's supposed to be one of five glimpses into alternate lives for the character, so I didn't want to get *too* detailed.

It could be interesting, though, to flesh one of the AUs out into more, if they weren't so depressing.

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[info]sileas
2003-06-11 11:18 am UTC (link)
We-ell... it's supposed to be one of five glimpses into alternate lives for the character, so I didn't want to get *too* detailed.


Oh. I didn't know that was the idea. I just started reading the story right away.

It could be interesting, though, to flesh one of the AUs out into more, if they weren't so depressing.

But depressing AU's are fun! *g*

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[info]musesfool
2003-06-11 11:40 am UTC (link)
Oh. I didn't know that was the idea. I just started reading the story right away.

No worries. There will be more, just probably nor more of that specific AU. *g*

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[info]semielliptical
2003-06-11 04:40 pm UTC (link)
This is so interesting, looking at what Remus would be like if he were *almost* bitten, very different from what I would imagine if he had never encountered the werewolf at all. He certainly learned from the experience, which fits so well with him being in Ravenclaw.

I think the part I liked reading the most is the beginning, Remus sneaking out to have fun. Brave little baby!Remus!

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[info]musesfool
2003-06-12 08:45 am UTC (link)
This is so interesting, looking at what Remus would be like if he were *almost* bitten, very different from what I would imagine if he had never encountered the werewolf at all.

Cool! Glad it works for you.

I think the part I liked reading the most is the beginning, Remus sneaking out to have fun. Brave little baby!Remus!

*g*

Poor boy. It's the only fun he gets in the whole damn story.

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